Mindset for IELTS - Level 1 (Unit 07: Fame And The Media)
It is also good to give specific examples for some of your points.
For example, 'Many celebrities have got into trouble after getting angry with reporters and photographers who were following them' could be added at* to support the first point in the student's second paragraph.
1. Even people like Bill Gates, who gives most of his money to charity, are criticised!
2. Many famous people have become ill due to overwork and always being in public view.
3. For example, everyone has seen pictures of Harper, the young daughter of David and Victoria Beckham.
Famous people are often rich.
You might have a lot of fans.
You will be able to use your fame and money to help others.