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Some people think that money has a negative effect on society and cannot make people happy.
Some people think that money has a positive effect on society and can make people happy.
Money has positive and negative effects on happiness for the following reasons.
If we do not have money, life is difficult. If we have enough money, life is easier. Wealthy
people worry less. Poor people worry more. Other things in life can make people happy.
Hobbies and sports make people happy. When you have hobbies and do sports, you meet
people and enjoy life. It can be better than having lots of money.
Model Answer
Some people think that money has a negative
effect on society and cannot make people
happy but others believe that it has a positive
effect on them. I think that money has positive
and negative effects on happiness for the
following reasons.
First of all, if we do not have money, life is
difficult. However, if we have enough money,
life is easier. Some people say that / I think
that wealthy people worry less and that poor
people worry more. In addition, other things
in life can make people happy, for example,
hobbies and sports. When you have hobbies
and do sports, you meet people and enjoy
life and this can be better than having lots of
money.
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