Presenting the data
After the overview, you need to write some more paragraphs to give the detail that proves
your statements. For example, if your overview said 'men worked longer hours than women',
you need to give data to support that statement. Do not list every single number.You need to
organise the data and select the most important data.
Activity 2.11
Look at this answer. What's wrong?
Answer
There is no overview, no summary and no selecting. The answer just copies the task prompt and then lists the information in the charts, one by one.
The following tables show the average age of students at a college, and how happy the students were with their courses.
How happy students were with their courses
Average age of students
The tables show the average age of students at a college, and how happy the students
were with their courses. There are certificate students and diploma students.
Certificate students were very happy with their course (73 per cent) or happy with their
course (16 per cent) or unhappy with their course (10 per cent). Not many of them were
very unhappy with their course (only 1 per cent). Diploma students were very unhappy
with their course (41 per cent). unhappy with their course (42 per cent) or happy with their
course (12 per cent) or very happy with their course (5 per cent).
Certificate students were 15 to 25 years old (79 per cent) or 25 to 35 years old (18 per
cent). Not many of them were 35 to 45 years of age (1 per cent) or over 45 (2 per cent). On
the other hand, 17 per cent of diploma students were 15 to 25 years old, and 62 per cent
were aged 25 to 35, while 20 per cent were 35 to 45 years old and only 1 per cent were
aged 45 and over.
Activity 2.12
Look at this answer. What's wrong?
Answer
There is no mention of the 'over 60' category. This means that the key points are missing and the answer will not get a good mark.
The following tables describe bill-paying habits and attitudes to debt, by age group.
Worried about unpaid bills
Pay bills on time
The survey results show that as people get older, particularly after age 45, they become
better at paying their bills on time and become less worried about their unpaid bills.
There seems to be a relationship between these things.
Few people aged under 45 (only 35 per cent of under-30s and 42 per cent of 30- to
45-year-olds) don't pay their bills on time. Meanwhile, 70 per cent of 45- to 60-year-olds
pay their bills on time. It seems that bill-paying behaviour splits the population into two
groups: under 45 and over 45.
This is the same with worrying about unpaid bills. In the two younger age groups, most
people are worried about them: 75 per cent of the under-30s and 66 per cent of the 30-45s.
In contrast, only 33 per cent of 45- to 60-year-olds are concerned about unpaid bills.
Overall, there seems to be a connection between not paying bills on time and being
worried about unpaid bills. Where there is one, you also see the other.
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