Practice Test 3
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Some people think that boys and girls should be educated in the same schools. Others, however, believe that girls achieve better results when educated in single-sex schools.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
Sample answer
For the past decade, parents, students and psychologists have clashed over the issue
where should children be educated in single-sex schools or in the same schools. I believe
that education in single-sex schools is more efficient for boys and girls for two reasons.
First, boys and girls have the big difference in mental development. Some research shows
that a girl's brain is different from a boy's brain. If you accept that premise, coeducation
probably will not work satisfactorily for every child. For example, I studied with female and
male and I remember that in primary school girls could perceive information more easily than
boys; however, in high school boys was definitely more successful. Moreover, coeducation
does have the advantage of being politically acceptable at the same time it has not anything
with improvement of academic performance.
The second reason to support the education in single-sex schools is that it helps students
to achieve good results and focus on study. It is fact that boys feel more comfortable and self-confident in single-sex schools, because they do not need to show off and worry about what
the girls might think. For instance, it was really hard to concentrate on study in my class,
because I always thought about opinions of others. Thus, male and female become more
competitive in a single-sex setting.
In conclusion, children become more successful to be educated in separate classes,
because it helps them break down gender stereotypes. Moreover, single-sex education is a
good way to encourage children to be enthusiastic, to be curious and self-confident.
[263 words]
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Task Response
The writer has responded very well to this task. The essay presents the writer's position
clearly and extends and supports the main ideas. However, the task requires both views to
be discussed and this writer needs to extend their discussion on the opposing view. The word
count is fine.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of this essay is good - it is logically organised and follows the standard layout
of an essay with a strong thesis statement at the end of the Introduction, topic sentences
followed by supporting statements and examples in each Body Paragraph, and a solid
Conclusion, which gives the writer's opinion.
The writer has used a variety of linking words well, for example, moreover, for instance,
thus, in conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The use of academic vocabulary in this essay is both varied and accurate. Some examples
of high-level vocabulary include psychologists, coeducation, academic performance, gender
stereotypes, curious. This writer has also used some less common phrases such as 'have
clashed over·, 'if you accept that premise·, 'break down gender stereotypes·. The use of 'it has
not anything' in the first Body Paragraph is confusing due to a wrong word choice; however,
this seems to be the only problem with word choice. There are no spelling errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
This essay has a variety of complex sentences and many of these have no errors. However,
there are some errors, mostly with basic grammar items such as articles (the education) and
singular/plural use (female and male). The grammar errors do not interfere with meaning in
this essay and overall it displays a good use of grammar.
Overall this essay would achieve a GOOD band score and is very well written.
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